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Janice J Kennedy
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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 10:21 AM    Post subject: Summer --Tanka Reply with quote




Summer Tanka


Shade is scorching hot.
The grass is brown and sunbaked.
A hot summer day.
No, relief from heat in sight.
Summer is blue blazing hot!



The beat for tanka's is:

5
7
5
7
7

I challenge everyone else to write a tanka. They don't rhyme and are only 5 lines.
Any topic is doable. Give it a try.
I'll give everyone who writes one, 50 points!



~Jan



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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 11:15 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Do we post in this thread?

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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 11:21 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, I think it would be good, to keep them all together.
It would be easier to keep track of them, that way. And I wouldn't miss
any, that way!

~ Jan Very Happy

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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 11:31 AM    Post subject: Summer 2012 Reply with quote

The insanity
of this summer's driving heat
turns asphalt to fudge
makes children run back inside.
makes me grateful for A/C!

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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 11:41 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great job, Mark.

I especially like the last line. My A/C went out on Wednesday evening.
I was very grateful, it was fixed the next day. 103 here the past 4 days.

~ Jan icon_salut Applause Very Happy

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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 11:53 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

oh wow Jan! I would've hoofed it down to Walmart with a lawn chair LOL

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PostPosted: Friday, 03 August 2012, 12:00 PM    Post subject: Reply with quote

A Micky D is right around the corner from me.
Walmart is 10 miles away. I only got a small heat rash.
Tomorrow will only be 99. Laughing

~ Jan Laughing Rolling Eyes Laughing

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PostPosted: Saturday, 04 August 2012, 1:06 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, Mark, I love your line about ashphalt turning to fudge. Here is my poem:

Blisters burning feet
shoes too small and tearing skin
socks absorb my blood
Crisped up like char toasted bread
fleshwell done: ready for plating.

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PostPosted: Saturday, 04 August 2012, 2:21 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks Voyager! Your poem is uncomfortable... wow, such great imagery Smile well done.

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PostPosted: Saturday, 04 August 2012, 5:20 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

I agree with, Mark. Then summer heat does make you feel uncomfortable.
Your writing is very expressive. Well done.

I forgot to mention, that everyone can write up to 3 tankas.
You may use different topics for each one if you would like.

~ Jan icon_salut angryfire wav angryfire icon_salut

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PostPosted: Saturday, 04 August 2012, 19:13 PM    Post subject: Reply with quote




Another tanka, this is my second one,
I have one more that I can do. Everyone can
post three.



Sweat pouring off me.
Sure could use a cool shower.
Cold water I need.
Water from both taps is hot.
This heat wave is melting me.

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PostPosted: Sunday, 05 August 2012, 0:57 AM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice poem, Jan. What made you decide to write 'Cold water I need' instead of 'I need cold water' ?

Knocking on the Glass

Knocking on the glass;
It desperately wants out.
Cannot feel the breeze,
So continually bangs
Against the window.

The Dung Beetle

With my ball of dung
I struggle up the mountain.
Robbers could be near,
Waiting to steal the food store
I have painstakingly rolled.

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PostPosted: Sunday, 05 August 2012, 14:26 PM    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting tankas, Bryony.

Good job. Thank you so much for entering this challenge.


~ Jan Very Happy Applause wav Applause Very Happy

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